Trần Anh Dũng
(TranAnhDzung)
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Cho hỏi nhanh chút: read-between-the-line chính xác ra nghĩa là gì vậy?
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Trần Anh Dũng
Đặng Nguyệt Minh
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As far as I know, it means to infer, to understand.
Trần Anh Dũng
(TranAnhDzung)
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hê hê, làm ơn giải thích cụ thể thêm tí nữa em.
Nguyễn Quỳnh My
(nguyenquynhmy)
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Nguyễn Diệu Hương đã viết:about Nguyet Anh 's essay ... I don't know how long it will take me to write such an essay.
Just a thought ..I don't really understand the first reason. It seems a little bit irrelevant. For instance, in the U.S, people work 8h/day and have weekends but the comunities still seem to break down. Without that paragraph, the essay will still be very nice.
U're quite right
Putnam writes it's not because of all the workload or that kind of stuff...but the decreasing national interest due to the creation of TV.
Huntington, another well-known conservative writer believes, this decreasing national interest was due to some of the issues like: immigration without total assimilation (go to chinatown, u'll see), distrust of the govt after Vietnam and Watergate, ....
Reasonable or not, it's all up to u to decide. Btw, she wrote abt Vietnam, not the US.
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The high road toll is robbing our society of many people who could otherwise be leading useful and productive lives. How can society protect itself from these losses?
Solution:
The high road toll has become an alert problem in all countries because most of casualties in road accidents are at the labor age. There are many solutions to the problem but, in my opinion, three most important ones are: to improve peoples understanding, to issue strict laws and to build up infrastructure.
It is common knowledge that only when people know well about traffic rules do they obey them. Hence, I suggest that lessons about traffic rules should be taught as soon as children go to nursery school. Then, in higher courses, teachers should regularly organize games or competitions through which students can pick up information about traffic. The more interesting the activities are, the more students want to learn about traffic. Besides, traffic rules should be informed to all commoners. Mass media is very useful for the purpose. For example, television programs keep us informed about changes in traffic rules, newspaper articles alert us about road accidents, etc...Thanks to the popularity of these media, traffic rules will be more widespread.
However, some people still break laws though they know them well. So, in these cases, strict laws and punishments will be more effective. To take examples, drunk drivers will be abandoned from driving for some months or those who pass red light will be fined much money. These strict punishments will prevent everyone from breaking traffic rules, so, indirectly reduces road accidents.
Last but not least, the government should improve infrastructure, including road systems, signposts, traffic lights. No matter how carefully we obey traffic rules, we are likely to cause accidents if road quality is too low or we can not make out signposts. It is time government did something to repair road systems
Though these solutions are not enough, they are still three of the most important ones to the problem. I do believe that if society takes these methods seriously there will be a surprising decline in the road toll.
The high road toll is robbing our society of many people who could otherwise be leading useful and productive lives. How can society protect itself from these losses?
Solution:
The high road toll has become an alert problem in all countries because most of casualties in road accidents are at the labor age. There are many solutions to the problem but, in my opinion, three most important ones are: to improve peoples understanding, to issue strict laws and to build up infrastructure.
It is common knowledge that only when people know well about traffic rules do they obey them. Hence, I suggest that lessons about traffic rules should be taught as soon as children go to nursery school. Then, in higher courses, teachers should regularly organize games or competitions through which students can pick up information about traffic. The more interesting the activities are, the more students want to learn about traffic. Besides, traffic rules should be informed to all commoners. Mass media is very useful for the purpose. For example, television programs keep us informed about changes in traffic rules, newspaper articles alert us about road accidents, etc...Thanks to the popularity of these media, traffic rules will be more widespread.
However, some people still break laws though they know them well. So, in these cases, strict laws and punishments will be more effective. To take examples, drunk drivers will be abandoned from driving for some months or those who pass red light will be fined much money. These strict punishments will prevent everyone from breaking traffic rules, so, indirectly reduces road accidents.
Last but not least, the government should improve infrastructure, including road systems, signposts, traffic lights. No matter how carefully we obey traffic rules, we are likely to cause accidents if road quality is too low or we can not make out signposts. It is time government did something to repair road systems
Though these solutions are not enough, they are still three of the most important ones to the problem. I do believe that if society takes these methods seriously there will be a surprising decline in the road toll.
Nguyễn Quỳnh My
(nguyenquynhmy)
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very well-organized, clear, and straightforward. There are some minor stumbles without which this essay would be better.
Trần Anh Dũng
(TranAnhDzung)
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Still I'm sure this one will get you an A whether you're in high school or in a English comp course. Or a 5.5-6 if this is a Toefl essay.
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Could u point out the mistakes and correct them ? Thax.
Nguyễn Diệu Hương
(dieuhautotbung)
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Actually, I can't find any grammar mistakes so I just change some phrases into the way I personally prefer
The high road toll has become an alert problem in all countries because most of casualties in road accidents are at the labor age. --> Among many solutions to the problem, three most important ones are: to improve people' s understanding, to issue strict laws and to build up infrastructure.
--> Normally, only when people know well about traffic rules do they obey them. --> Therefore, I suggest that lessons about traffic rules should be taught as soon as children go to nursery schools. Then, in higher courses, teachers should regularly organize games or competitions through which students can pick up information about traffic. The more interesting the activities are, the more students want to learn about traffic. Besides, traffic rules should be informed to all commoners, --> especially via mass media. --> Television programs keep us informed about changes in traffic rules, newspaper articles alert us about road accidents, etc...Thanks to the popularity of these media, traffic rules will be more widespread.
However, some people still break laws though they know them well. In these cases, strict laws and punishments will be more effective. --> For instance, drunk drivers will be abandoned from driving for some months or those who pass red light will be fined much money. These strict punishments will prevent people from breaking traffic rules, thus, indirectly reduces road accidents.
Last but not least, the government should improve infrastructure, including road systems, signposts, traffic lights. No matter how carefully we obey traffic rules, we are likely to cause accidents if road quality is too low or we can not make out signposts. It is time government --> took action to repair road systems.
Though these solutions are not enough, they are still three of the most important ones to the problem. I do believe that if society takes these methods seriously there will be a surprising decline in the road toll.
The high road toll has become an alert problem in all countries because most of casualties in road accidents are at the labor age. --> Among many solutions to the problem, three most important ones are: to improve people' s understanding, to issue strict laws and to build up infrastructure.
--> Normally, only when people know well about traffic rules do they obey them. --> Therefore, I suggest that lessons about traffic rules should be taught as soon as children go to nursery schools. Then, in higher courses, teachers should regularly organize games or competitions through which students can pick up information about traffic. The more interesting the activities are, the more students want to learn about traffic. Besides, traffic rules should be informed to all commoners, --> especially via mass media. --> Television programs keep us informed about changes in traffic rules, newspaper articles alert us about road accidents, etc...Thanks to the popularity of these media, traffic rules will be more widespread.
However, some people still break laws though they know them well. In these cases, strict laws and punishments will be more effective. --> For instance, drunk drivers will be abandoned from driving for some months or those who pass red light will be fined much money. These strict punishments will prevent people from breaking traffic rules, thus, indirectly reduces road accidents.
Last but not least, the government should improve infrastructure, including road systems, signposts, traffic lights. No matter how carefully we obey traffic rules, we are likely to cause accidents if road quality is too low or we can not make out signposts. It is time government --> took action to repair road systems.
Though these solutions are not enough, they are still three of the most important ones to the problem. I do believe that if society takes these methods seriously there will be a surprising decline in the road toll.
Trần Anh Dũng
(TranAnhDzung)
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The problem is though, can you write such a perfect essay in 30 minutes?
Nguyễn Diệu Hương
(dieuhautotbung)
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well, we already know all the topics before the test so if we can practice writing all of them, there is a possibility of writing a perfect essay on then test.
That was my intention for last summer but eventually, it turned out to be impossible for such a lazy person like me.
That was my intention for last summer but eventually, it turned out to be impossible for such a lazy person like me.
Nguyễn Quỳnh My
(nguyenquynhmy)
Thành viên danh dự
Solution:
The high road toll has become an alert problem in all countries because most of casualties in road accidents are at the labor age. There are many solutions to the problem but, in my opinion, three most important ones are: to improve peoples understanding, to issue strict laws and to build up infrastructure.
if i remember it right, u cant use semicolon when the prior part is not a complete sentence
However, some people still break laws though they know them well. So, in this case, strict laws and punishments will be more effective. For instance, drunk drivers will be forbidden from driving for some months or those who pass /ignore the red light will be fined much more money. These strict punishments will prevent everyone from breaking traffic rules, thus, indirectly reduce road accidents.
Last but not least, the government should improve infrastructure, including road systems, signposts, and traffic lights. No matter how carefully we obey traffic rules, we are likely to cause accidents if road quality is too low or we can not make out signposts. It is time government did something to repair road systems
Though these solutions are not enough [word choice], they are still three of the most important ones [to the problem]. I do believe that if society takes these methods seriously there will be a drammatic decline in the road toll.
The high road toll has become an alert problem in all countries because most of casualties in road accidents are at the labor age. There are many solutions to the problem but, in my opinion, three most important ones are: to improve peoples understanding, to issue strict laws and to build up infrastructure.
if i remember it right, u cant use semicolon when the prior part is not a complete sentence
However, some people still break laws though they know them well. So, in this case, strict laws and punishments will be more effective. For instance, drunk drivers will be forbidden from driving for some months or those who pass /ignore the red light will be fined much more money. These strict punishments will prevent everyone from breaking traffic rules, thus, indirectly reduce road accidents.
Last but not least, the government should improve infrastructure, including road systems, signposts, and traffic lights. No matter how carefully we obey traffic rules, we are likely to cause accidents if road quality is too low or we can not make out signposts. It is time government did something to repair road systems
Though these solutions are not enough [word choice], they are still three of the most important ones [to the problem]. I do believe that if society takes these methods seriously there will be a drammatic decline in the road toll.
Trần Anh Dũng
(TranAnhDzung)
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uh... there's 1 'm' in the word dramatic right?
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How about ur competition? Why doesnt anyone give the topic and post their essay? Looking forward to ur compositions
Nguyễn Diệu Hương
(dieuhautotbung)
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sorry but I'm not in favor of a competition Just wanna help people proofread their essays. This is my most recent essay. Please point out all the mistakes. Thanks
“No late papers. No plagiarism. No excuse for skipping classes.” This was the way my English teacher began the first course of the year. I looked at her and the students around me. All were new faces. I had no idea how I could handle this first English course in a brand new school in a brand new country. Despite these worries, I have had a wonderful experience in my English class thanks to my teacher.
Ms. Cohen is one of the most knowledgeable and skilful teachers I have ever had. Her way of approaching any character in a story is unique. Every character is like a jigsaw puzzle, made up of many small details. She helps us pick up those significant details and lets us decide on our own their personalities. Never setting her own ideas, she often begins our class with an open-ended question. She patiently listens to everyone’s opinions and tactfully leads the discussion.
The most important thing she has taught me is simply “Never give up.” Once, I struggle for five hours to come up with an idea for my paper on Hamlet and another five hours to finish it. Then I ended up with a C+. Exhausted, I burst out crying. Just then, my teacher offered to help me. I went to her house with lots of questions for the next paper. Surprisingly, she did not answer those questions. Instead, she slowly explained to me all the basic concepts of English literature from theme, thesis and metaphor to figurative language. For the first time I realized that English is not just verbs, nouns, adjectives and prepositions as I used to learn. It is, indeed, as beautiful as my own language.
As she kept encouraging me, I determined not to disappoint her. I read stories over and over again, asked and debated more in class, and worked hard on papers. Sometimes, I needed to rewrite my whole paper when I realized that I strayed from the topic. For the paper on Donne and Shakespeare sonnets, after a whole day looking up new words which did not appear in any of my dictionaries, trying to paraphrase line by line, sentence by sentence, I went to her to say “I simply cannot do this. I need help.” She smiled at me and said “Never underestimate your ability. I know you can. Have you looked at the whole sonnet and figured out what it is about?” Running back to my room as quickly as possible, I kept thinking about her question. I realized it was necessary to initially understand the general idea of the sonnets before focusing on single words. I was able to finish that paper with an A-. My English has much improved. On the term exam, I got 100 percent for an essay. My English teacher was the first person I showed my term grades to and she was even happier than me.
Ms. Cohen, my first English teacher here, is the person who has taught me how beautiful English is and how far a person can improve.
Just wanna help people proofread their essays. This is my most recent essay. Please point out all the mistakes. Thanks “No late papers. No plagiarism. No excuse for skipping classes.” This was the way my English teacher began the first course of the year. I looked at her and the students around me. All were new faces. I had no idea how I could handle this first English course in a brand new school in a brand new country. Despite these worries, I have had a wonderful experience in my English class thanks to my teacher.
Ms. Cohen is one of the most knowledgeable and skilful teachers I have ever had. Her way of approaching any character in a story is unique. Every character is like a jigsaw puzzle, made up of many small details. She helps us pick up those significant details and lets us decide on our own their personalities. Never setting her own ideas, she often begins our class with an open-ended question. She patiently listens to everyone’s opinions and tactfully leads the discussion.
The most important thing she has taught me is simply “Never give up.” Once, I struggle for five hours to come up with an idea for my paper on Hamlet and another five hours to finish it. Then I ended up with a C+. Exhausted, I burst out crying. Just then, my teacher offered to help me. I went to her house with lots of questions for the next paper. Surprisingly, she did not answer those questions. Instead, she slowly explained to me all the basic concepts of English literature from theme, thesis and metaphor to figurative language. For the first time I realized that English is not just verbs, nouns, adjectives and prepositions as I used to learn. It is, indeed, as beautiful as my own language.
As she kept encouraging me, I determined not to disappoint her. I read stories over and over again, asked and debated more in class, and worked hard on papers. Sometimes, I needed to rewrite my whole paper when I realized that I strayed from the topic. For the paper on Donne and Shakespeare sonnets, after a whole day looking up new words which did not appear in any of my dictionaries, trying to paraphrase line by line, sentence by sentence, I went to her to say “I simply cannot do this. I need help.” She smiled at me and said “Never underestimate your ability. I know you can. Have you looked at the whole sonnet and figured out what it is about?” Running back to my room as quickly as possible, I kept thinking about her question. I realized it was necessary to initially understand the general idea of the sonnets before focusing on single words. I was able to finish that paper with an A-. My English has much improved. On the term exam, I got 100 percent for an essay. My English teacher was the first person I showed my term grades to and she was even happier than me.
Ms. Cohen, my first English teacher here, is the person who has taught me how beautiful English is and how far a person can improve.
Đặng Thái Hằng
(Thái Hằng)
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sis Huong, what's the topic? Is there any word limit?
I like this kinda essay on experience and people very much.
So i've rewritten your first 2 paragraphs in my style. ( well, just for my own interest, coz i found it so appealing, hehe ). Those sounds a bit figurative, i dont know if it suits the type.
“ No late papers. No plagiarism. No excuse for skipping class.” A cold face, a resolute glint, my English teacher began the first course of the year with those “metal” words. I was there, sinking in a class full of new faces, in a school of all strangers, in a country of thousands of kms from my hometown. I felt like I was in a terrible slump, too confused, I didn’t have any idea how I would handle the course. Yet just after a short time, in absolute contrast to my assumption, the teacher who’d feared me the most, turned out to be the one that gave birth to my first wonderful experience in this school.
Indeed, Ms. Cohen is a combination of knowledge, skill and love. She often begins our class with an open-ended question, provoking our curiosity and desire. Then the way she approaches any character in a story always makes the lesson far less dry and much more appealing. Every character is like a jigsaw puzzle, made up of many small details. She helps us pick up significant details and stimulates us to decide the characters’ personalities on our own. Patiently listening to everyone’s opinions, and then tactfully leading the whole class, she makes every single lesson or discussion a great time for us. Now all of us have felt much more confident to solve “ puzzles”.
I like this kinda essay on experience and people very much.
So i've rewritten your first 2 paragraphs in my style. ( well, just for my own interest, coz i found it so appealing, hehe ). Those sounds a bit figurative, i dont know if it suits the type.
“ No late papers. No plagiarism. No excuse for skipping class.” A cold face, a resolute glint, my English teacher began the first course of the year with those “metal” words. I was there, sinking in a class full of new faces, in a school of all strangers, in a country of thousands of kms from my hometown. I felt like I was in a terrible slump, too confused, I didn’t have any idea how I would handle the course. Yet just after a short time, in absolute contrast to my assumption, the teacher who’d feared me the most, turned out to be the one that gave birth to my first wonderful experience in this school.
Indeed, Ms. Cohen is a combination of knowledge, skill and love. She often begins our class with an open-ended question, provoking our curiosity and desire. Then the way she approaches any character in a story always makes the lesson far less dry and much more appealing. Every character is like a jigsaw puzzle, made up of many small details. She helps us pick up significant details and stimulates us to decide the characters’ personalities on our own. Patiently listening to everyone’s opinions, and then tactfully leading the whole class, she makes every single lesson or discussion a great time for us. Now all of us have felt much more confident to solve “ puzzles”.
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Lý Tuấn Minh
(eminem10a1)
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do consider revising this essay lauren. for example:
"in a country of thousands of kms from my hometown"... there's no "of".
also, don't translate from our mother tounge: "lesson far less dry ".
"in a country of thousands of kms from my hometown"... there's no "of".
also, don't translate from our mother tounge: "lesson far less dry ".
Nguyen Thanh Ha
(Pooh)
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Nguyễn Diệu Hương đã viết:sorry but I'm not in favor of a competition
“No late papers. No plagiarism. No excuse for skipping classes.” This was the way my English teacher began the first course of the year. I looked at her and the students around me. All were new faces. I had no idea how I could handle this first English course in a brand new school in a brand new country. Despite these worries, I have had a wonderful experience in my English class thanks to my teacher.
Ms. Cohen is one of the most knowledgeable and skilful teachers I have ever had. Her way of approaching any character in a story is unique. Every character is like a jigsaw puzzle, made up of many small details. She helps us pick up those significant details and lets us decide on our own their personalities. Never setting her own ideas, she often begins our class with an open-ended question. She patiently listens to everyone’s opinions and tactfully leads the discussion.
The most important thing she has taught me is simply “Never give up.” Once, I struggle for five hours to come up with an idea for my paper on Hamlet and another five hours to finish it. -> struggled co phai khong nhi, khong thi se hieu la minh luc nao cung the, ma the thi con once lam gi.
Then I ended up with a C+. Exhausted, I burst out crying. Just then, my teacher offered to help me. I went to her house with lots of questions for the next paper. Surprisingly, she did not answer those questions. Instead, she slowly explained to me all the basic concepts of English literature from theme, thesis and metaphor to figurative language. For the first time I realized that English is not just verbs, nouns, adjectives and prepositions as I used to learn. It is, indeed, as beautiful as my own language.
As she kept encouraging me, I determined not to disappoint her. I read stories over and over again, asked and debated more in class, and worked hard on papers ->neu to khong nham, ve truoc da so sanh roi thi ve sau cung nen nhat quan: worked harder
Sometimes, I needed to rewrite my whole paper when I realized that I strayed from the topic. For the paper on Donne and Shakespeare sonnets, after a whole day looking up new words which did not appear in any of my dictionaries, trying to paraphrase line by line, sentence by sentence, I went to her to say “I simply cannot do this. I need help.” She smiled at me and said “Never underestimate your ability. I know you can. Have you looked at the whole sonnet and figured out what it is about?” Running back to my room as quickly as possible, I kept thinking about her question. I realized it was necessary to initially understand the general idea of the sonnets before focusing on single words. I was able to finish that paper with an A-. My English has much improved. On the term exam, I got 100 percent for an essay. My English teacher was the first person I showed my term grades to and she was even happier than me.
Ms. Cohen, my first English teacher here, is the person who has taught me how beautiful English is and how far a person can improve.
Overall, I think despite little mistakes, this essay is very interesting and your tone very earnest. Potential for Common Application Personal Statement
Nguyễn Diệu Hương
(dieuhautotbung)
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hic.. I already sent it before getting your feedbacks. Anyway, it is not too bad for an essay written during the break, right?
help! I still have 4 more essays..(
help! I still have 4 more essays..
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Đặng Thái Hằng
(Thái Hằng)
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"do consider revising this essay lauren. for example:
"in a country of thousands of kms from my hometown"... there's no "of".
also, don't translate from our mother tounge: "lesson far less dry "."
I know, " a country thousands of..." is better grammatically yet adding "of" makes the sentence sound smoother. Is it acceptable?
"dry lesson, dry speech": they still use it, i see no problem here. So what 's the so called native word in this case u would choose to replace it? ( btw, what's translate?)
"in a country of thousands of kms from my hometown"... there's no "of".
also, don't translate from our mother tounge: "lesson far less dry "."
I know, " a country thousands of..." is better grammatically yet adding "of" makes the sentence sound smoother. Is it acceptable?
"dry lesson, dry speech": they still use it, i see no problem here. So what 's the so called native word in this case u would choose to replace it? ( btw, what's translate?)
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