Sonnet Poem: Friends Forever

[Nguyễn Kiều Trâm (Kieu tram)]

Bài viết:
Friends Forever

Never before I think you'll go away
Maybe I don't look for that day's coming
But time will not let me dream anymore
You will leave me by myself since that day
Beautiful memories with the roads we were walking
I have never had that great time before
The truth sometimes hurts you and me so bad
Without you, I feel lonely in this life
My heart always has your heavenly smile
Help me when I feel bad with your kindness

Remember the time we shared together
And we will still be bestfriend forever.

 

[Nguyễn Vân Mai (nvanmai)]

Comments from the Writing Contest Board of Examiners:

“I feel the struggle of the author to clearly express his/ her emotions. Maybe (hopefully) that’s because the emotions are too deep for words. There are some old cliché as well as some awkward expressions in this poem. The writer probably didn’t invest much time in writing this poem. Besides all this, there are some good images such as the road they were walking together.”

“This poem gives me the feeling of reading the lyrics of a song written by a boy/girl band with so many clichés, not much originality. Sometimes the unnecessary use of melancholic verses like "not let me dream any more" leaves me wondering whether she is writing about friendship or love.”

 

[Nguyễn Kiều Trâm (Kieu tram)]

Thank you for your comments I wrote this poem almost three years ago since I was far from my friends, my family for the first time. This was my feeling when I heard my best friend wouldnt wait for me until I came back home that summer. I was so sad and thought we could never met each other again. That's right, it's been more than three years now.....